Week Fifteen-"Living in a Dream"
Welcome to "Living in a Dream". The fact that you're here tells me you are reading my book "Behind the Song: A Songwriter's Guide to Finishing Songs". Are you getting inspired yet?
Below are two versions of the song after I took some feedback into consideration. In the original version, the 2nd half of the chorus was the catchier part of the chorus. Instead of waiting until the 2nd half to introduce the catchy part, in the new version, I go straight into it. It's also the phrasing of it that makes it more memorable.
Also, I sped the song up a bit in the newer version. Felt better at that speed. Either that, or I drank too much coffee.
Tell me, what do you think? Do you agree with the feedback that I got? Why or why not?
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As always I encourage you to listen on headphones. Way better than those computer speakers.
Thank you so much for your support. It allows me to continue making music, which I was put on this planet to do. In turn I am able to support YOU in doing what YOU'RE meant to do. It truly is a reciprocal circle. We need all of us to shine our brightest and step into our greatness, and it's my belief that it's better (and not to mention more fun), with the help and support of others. So, THANK YOU!
Oooh you look so good
In the morning like I dreamed you would
What a wild and crazy night
You asked me for a cigarette and that was just the start of it
Then you told me not to go
And I pretended not to know
What was really on your mind
And where we’d end up at night
I’m living in a dream
Cuz you’re here next to me
I’m living in a dream
You’re everything I need tonight
so let’s not waste time, let’s do this right
Then you took me by the hand
Led me to the floor so we could slow dance
I could smell your whiskey breath
Mixed with that cigarette and now it is my favorite scent
Then you told me not to go
And I pretended not to know
What was really on your mind
And where we’d end up at night
I’m living in a dream
Cuz you’re here next to me
I’m living in a dream
You’re everything I need tonight
so let’s not waste time, let’s do this right
And you tilted up my face
The Perfect time and the perfect place
I looked up into your eyes
And our lips they finally meet they taste so salty and so sweet
Then you whispered “We should go”
I tried hard not to show
All the nervousness inside
That for a night you’d be mine
I’m living in a dream
Cuz you’re here next to me
I’m living in a dream
You’re everything I need tonight
so let’s not waste time, let’s do this right